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The Continuation Writing（读后续写）
Learning aims:
1. For reading: learn to get the main idea and find the key information from the passage, eg. time, place, people, event...
2. For writing: learn to find the connection between the two given sentences and decide how to develop the story.
3. For writing: learn to use the given words to make a complete story.

I. 读后续写要求及方法指导
◆阅读材料
（1）所需阅读的短文词数在350词以内；
（2）一般为记叙文故事类文章，故事情节曲折起伏、有趣，可拓展性强。
◆写作要求
（1）所续写短文的词数应为150左右（词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分）；
（2）至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
（3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
（4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
◆续写步骤
（1）精读文章，确定文章线索。每篇文章都有各自独特的写作思路，通过精读文章，找到该篇文章的写作线索，如是以时间为线索还是以空间为线索等，这样有利于考生“顺藤摸瓜（结尾）”。
（2）研读续写段落的首句，认真分析两句之间以及两句与前面段落的关系，确定故事发展的大致方向，以便于确定写作思路。
（3）分析划线词汇，确定续写选用词汇。对所给的10个划线词语进行分析分类，例如可按照词性（动词、名词、形容词、副词等）或按照表达的时间、地点、人物、事件、行为等进行分类，
（4）回扣原文，揣摩续写思路。根据文章后面的要求，再次快速回读短文，抓住文章的思路，结合段首的提示语，最终确定续写段落的思路，同时结合文章划线词语提示，确定续写段落的内容。
（5）拟写草稿，修改错词病句。在确定了思路和内容之后，最关键的就是结合提示语或者文中划线的关键词拟写草稿。拟写时，注意句子结构的多样性，语言的丰富性，并通过句与句之间连接词的正确使用，使上下文连贯。
（6）标出续写部分中使用到的原材料中标有下划线的关键词语。这一点可以帮助考生自己检查关键词的使用情况并根据情况做出修改。最后在誊写文字时，务必做到“字迹工整、清晰”。
◆考查能力
　 读后续写是一种将阅读与写作紧密结合的考查形式，旨在考查学生的综合语言运用能力。与应用文不同，故事续写除了要求学生掌握丰富的词汇和句式外，还注重学生的内容构思和情节衔接的能力。主要聚焦在以下四个方面：
　　一是把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力。学生需要了解给定短文的主要内容，清楚其关键词和语言结构的使用情况，并通过续写短文表现出来。
　　二是语言运用的准确性和丰富性。期望学生在词汇和语言结构的使用方面准确、恰当，能够根据内容需要使用较为高级的词汇和语言结构，阅卷老师会感觉这个学生很有水平。
　　三是对语篇结构的把控能力。考查学生对上下文逻辑关系的掌握情况，希望学生续写的短文语句连贯、有序。
　　四是创造性思维能力。这是对学生续写短文内容得要求，期望学生续写的短文具有较丰富的内容。该试题具有一定的开放性，要求学生详细和生动地描述情景、态度和感情，符合课程标准的要求和学生的能力水平。
◆评分原则
　阅卷时主要考虑以下内容：
（1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
（2）内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况；
（3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
（4）上下文的连贯性。

II. 读后续写高考真题分析 （2018年高考浙江卷）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.
We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.
His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. "The day starts at dawn on my farm," he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.
In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. "Don’t be late for supper," Uncle Paul cried, "and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!" "OK! " my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven(编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.

注意：
（1）所续写短文的词数应为l50左右；
（2）至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语：
（3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
（4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. ______________________
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Paragraph 2: We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. _______________________
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【解析】
读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息，不仅能读懂字面含义，还要理清文章的脉络。续篇这篇短文时，考生要搞清楚故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置、人物思想情感的变化等。在此基础上，考生要顺着文章的思路，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用语言表达出来。
要点分析：
文章体裁
（316词）
文章大意

划线
词汇
分析
名词
人

物

其它

动词

形容词

所给句子
要点分析
第一句
重点词汇：
第二句
重点词汇：
两句之间关系和与前文关系

第一段内容推断：

第一段内容推断：

比较：

2017年高考浙江卷
2019年1月高二期末潍坊卷
文章体裁
记叙文 （341词）
记叙文 （317词）
文章大意
一位小学教师Mac Hollan与朋友们骑车旅行，在其他人帮一位朋友修理自行车时，他独自向前骑行，途中遭遇了狼的追赶，与狼斗争即将失败时，恰好一辆汽车经过...
一位女护士Nicole度假时在海里游泳，遭到鲨鱼袭击，尽管其他游泳者大喊试图把鲨鱼赶跑，但不幸的是Nicole的左腿被鲨鱼咬伤，左胳膊被咬掉...
划线
词汇
分析
名词
人
Mac, friends, Paul
Nicole, nurse, swimmers, children
物
bicycle, home, wolf, cars
beach, sharks, blood, arm
其它

动词
pedaled (骑行)，jumped, climb
realize, gathering
形容词

所给句子
要点分析
第一句
The car abruptly stopped in front of him.
The two swimmer accelerated toward Nicole, shouting for help.
第二句
A few minutes later, the other cyclist arrived.
When she woke up in the hospital,
Nicole found her left arm gone.
两句之间关系和与前文关系

III. 学生习作展示及问题分析
(A) Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. I stopped the horse in order to protect the little rabbit. Then my dad and I walked to the track where the rabit stayed. We caught it and found it hurt. I forgot the beautiful sight and only saw the weak live. My father and took the rabit to the farm house. Otherwise we helped the rabbit. Luckily we didn’t late for supper. We were happy to help animals in the nature.
We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. Unluckily, we forgot taking the lights. When we went to find the little rabit, we got lost. My father told me something important to keep me clam. We went along the tack and wanted to find a river. After we found the river, to our surprise, we saw the farm house opposite. In the meantime, my Uncle Paul, was taking my aunt to find us. They brought the lights. And we backed the farm house together. Although we lated for supper, my uncle and aunt cooked a big meal again. We were all happy in Albuquerque.
(B) Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. It was so cute. Then we saw some birds flying in front of us. We followed them for a long time. They were so beautiful but finally they flew away. Then we realized there was no sheep near us. And we couldn’t find the Uncle Paul’s house.
......
(C) Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. What a beautiful rabbit. Then my dad saw a black sheep in front of the river. My dad want to catch it. So he rode horses to catch sheep up...
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(D) Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. I shouted to my dad excitly: Dad! Dad! a rabit! a rabbit. Let’s catch it for dinner” “Good idea” My dad also delighted. We got a lot of stones on the ground and prepared to catch the rabbit. The rabbit was run away when we throw out stones. We also rade the horse. Suddenly, the rabbit fall down on the ground. “Nice” My dad and I catched it and went back. Prepared to give my uncle a great surprise. But we went a long time. I found we got lost.
………….
问题总结：
1. 衔接过渡和前后文逻辑方面：

2. 主题方面：情感态度、价值观

3. 语言方面：句子结构、时态等

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参考范文：
Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. My horse turned to the left to avoid the little rabbit as I held on tightly and tried not to fall. Then my dad turned around and shouted, “Hold on!” All of a sudden the horse began to run. My dad tried to keep up behind us. For a few minutes my horse slowed down and then stopped beside a river. I looked around and realized that we were off the track.
We had no idea where we were and it got dark. Luckily the stars came out and gave us a little light when we were looking for the way to the farm house. After what must have been several hours, we suddenly heard the sound of sheep in the distance. My dad and I both rode our horses towards the sound of the sheep. As we got closer we saw Uncle Paul with a flashlight waving us over. What a night!

通过阅读所给文章可知，父亲带儿子去西部荒野的一个朋友家体验农场生活，见父亲和叔叔骑马，儿子也很想骑，于是亲身上马体验。

（2）仔细审题，明确续写要求。一般短文后面的“注意”都有对此次短文续写的具体要求，如字数限制、使用几处下划线关键词语、续写段落的首句提示，这样考生做到“心中有数”。
(B) Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. It was so cute. Then we saw some birds flying in front of us. We followed them for a long time. They were so beautiful but finally they flew away. Then we realized there was no sheep near us. And we couldn’t find the Uncle Paul’s house.
We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. I knew we got lost. My dad wanted to call to Uncle Paul, but the telephone couldn’t work. I felt hungry and cold, and my dad looks very nervous.
“We are late for supper.” I said. Suddenly we heard someone cried dad’s name and my name. It was Uncle Paul. Then he appeared in our sight. We were excited. Then he lead us to his house.

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