如何提高书面表达句子的档次市公开课金奖市赛课一等奖课件.pptx

如何提升书面表示句子档次如何提升书面表示句子档次Welcome to our school 第1页第1页 你你你你英英英英国国国国朋朋朋朋友友友友正正正正在在在在做做做做一一一一个个个个课课课课题题题题；世世世世界界界界各各各各地地地地生生生生日日日日庆庆庆庆祝祝祝祝方方方方式式式式。他他他他请请请请你你你你简简简简介介介介中中中中国国国国学学学学生生生生过过过过生生生生日日日日方方方方式式式式。请请请请你你你你依据下列要点写一篇短文：依据下列要点写一篇短文：依据下列要点写一篇短文：依据下列要点写一篇短文：一、通常方式一、通常方式一、通常方式一、通常方式1 1 1 1生日聚会生日聚会生日聚会生日聚会2 2 2 2生日礼物生日礼物生日礼物生日礼物3 3 3 3生日祝愿生日祝愿生日祝愿生日祝愿二、我认为更故意义庆祝方式和理由二、我认为更故意义庆祝方式和理由二、我认为更故意义庆祝方式和理由二、我认为更故意义庆祝方式和理由 *词数词数词数词数100-120 100-120 100-120 100-120 （浙江卷）浙江卷）浙江卷）浙江卷）第2页第2页NowstudentsinChinacelebratetheirbirthdaysinmanyways.Usually,apartyisheld.Bestfriendsandrelativeswillcometotheparty.Theyusuallybuyagift.Theyshowtheirbestwishes.Sometimes,peoplesendshortmessagestooanditisbecomingverypopular.ButIthinkthatitsbettertohelpotherpeople.Weknowthatitsimportanttolearntohelpotherpeople.Helpingotherpeoplecandousalotofgood.Peoplewillhelpyoubecauseyouvehelpedthemandyoullbehappy学生作品（学生作品（1 1）第3页第3页 NowadaysstudentsinChinacelebratetheirNowadaysstudentsinChinacelebratetheirbirthdaysinvariousways.birthdaysinvariousways.Usually,apartyisheldsothatpeoplecangetUsually,apartyisheldsothatpeoplecangettogether.Bestfriends,aswellasrelatives,aregoingtotogether.Bestfriends,aswellasrelatives,aregoingtobeinvited.Itspolitetobuyasmallgiftwhichstandsbeinvited.Itspolitetobuyasmallgiftwhichstandsforonesbestwishes.Whatsmore,sendingshortforonesbestwishes.Whatsmore,sendingshortmessagesononesbirthdayisbecomingmoreandmessagesononesbirthdayisbecomingmoreandmorepopular,asaresultofitsconvenience.morepopular,asaresultofitsconvenience.However,asfarasImconcerned,itsmoreHowever,asfarasImconcerned,itsmoremeaningfultocareaboutothersthanaboutoneself.Asmeaningfultocareaboutothersthanaboutoneself.Asisknowntoall,togiveisbetterthantoreceive.isknowntoall,togiveisbetterthantoreceive.BirthdaysmeannotonlybeingolderbutmorehelpfulBirthdaysmeannotonlybeingolderbutmorehelpfulandusefultotheworld.Therefore,itsofimportanceandusefultotheworld.Therefore,itsofimportancetolearntohelpothers.Helpingothersononestolearntohelpothers.Helpingothersononesbirthdaycandoyoualotofgood.Foronething,birthdaycandoyoualotofgood.Foronething,peoplewillhelpyouinreturninthefuture;forpeoplewillhelpyouinreturninthefuture;foranother,youllbehappy.another,youllbehappy.Asaresult,IthinkitbettertohelpotherstospendAsaresult,Ithinkitbettertohelpotherstospendonesbirthday.onesbirthday.学生作品（学生作品（2 2）第4页第4页 NowadaysstudentsinChinacelebratetheirNowadaysstudentsinChinacelebratetheirbirthdaysinvariousways.birthdaysinvariousways.Usually,apartyisheldsothatpeoplecangetUsually,apartyisheldsothatpeoplecangettogether.Bestfriends,aswellasrelatives,aregoingtotogether.Bestfriends,aswellasrelatives,aregoingtobeinvited.Itspolitetobuyasmallgiftwhichstandsbeinvited.Itspolitetobuyasmallgiftwhichstandsforonesbestwishes.Whatsmore,sendingshortforonesbestwishes.Whatsmore,sendingshortmessagesononesbirthdayisbecomingmoreandmessagesononesbirthdayisbecomingmoreandmorepopular,asaresultofitsconvenience.morepopular,asaresultofitsconvenience.However,asfarasImconcerned,itsmoreHowever,asfarasImconcerned,itsmoremeaningfultocareaboutothersthanaboutoneself.Asmeaningfultocareaboutothersthanaboutoneself.Asisknowntoall,togiveisbetterthantoreceive.isknowntoall,togiveisbetterthantoreceive.BirthdaysmeannotonlybeingolderbutmorehelpfulBirthdaysmeannotonlybeingolderbutmorehelpfulandusefultotheworld.Therefore,itsofimportanceandusefultotheworld.Therefore,itsofimportancetolearntohelpothers.Helpingothersononestolearntohelpothers.Helpingothersononesbirthdaycandoyoualotofgood.Foronething,birthdaycandoyoualotofgood.Foronething,peoplewillhelpyouinreturninthefuture;forpeoplewillhelpyouinreturninthefuture;foranother,youllbehappy.another,youllbehappy.Asaresult,IthinkitbettertohelpotherstospendAsaresult,Ithinkitbettertohelpotherstospendonesbirthday.onesbirthday.学生作品（学生作品（2 2）第5页第5页1.1.要点齐全要点齐全2.2.较多语法结构和较多语法结构和高级高级词汇词汇 3.3.全文结构紧凑全文结构紧凑 高档书面表示要求：高档书面表示要求：第6页第6页1.1.1.1.时间：昨天下午放学后时间：昨天下午放学后时间：昨天下午放学后时间：昨天下午放学后 请依据下述情况写一篇请依据下述情况写一篇请依据下述情况写一篇请依据下述情况写一篇80-12080-12080-12080-120个单词英语新闻个单词英语新闻个单词英语新闻个单词英语新闻 广播稿，准备在你校广播台播出。广播稿，准备在你校广播台播出。广播稿，准备在你校广播台播出。广播稿，准备在你校广播台播出。2.2.2.2.地点：回家路上地点：回家路上地点：回家路上地点：回家路上3.3.3.3.人物：高一（人物：高一（人物：高一（人物：高一（2 2 2 2）班两名男生田力和段凯）班两名男生田力和段凯）班两名男生田力和段凯）班两名男生田力和段凯4.4.4.4.事件：边骑车边谈笑，后追逐一辆公交车，觉得好事件：边骑车边谈笑，后追逐一辆公交车，觉得好事件：边骑车边谈笑，后追逐一辆公交车，觉得好事件：边骑车边谈笑，后追逐一辆公交车，觉得好 玩。公交车遇红灯停下，两人来不及刹车，摔倒在玩。公交车遇红灯停下，两人来不及刹车，摔倒在玩。公交车遇红灯停下，两人来不及刹车，摔倒在玩。公交车遇红灯停下，两人来不及刹车，摔倒在 地。一人左手臂摔断，一人腿部受伤。地。一人左手臂摔断，一人腿部受伤。地。一人左手臂摔断，一人腿部受伤。地。一人左手臂摔断，一人腿部受伤。5.5.5.5.警示：严格遵守交通规则，切忌在马路上嬉笑玩耍。警示：严格遵守交通规则，切忌在马路上嬉笑玩耍。警示：严格遵守交通规则，切忌在马路上嬉笑玩耍。警示：严格遵守交通规则，切忌在马路上嬉笑玩耍。第7页第7页1.Therewasanaccidenthappenedtotwostudents2.inourschoolyesterdayafternoon.(典型病句）典型病句）Therewasanaccidentthathappenedtotwostudentsinourschoolyesterdayafternoon.(定语从句）定语从句）Anaccidentoccurredtotwostudentsinourschoolyesterdayafternoon.（高级词汇）（高级词汇）Anaccidenthappenedtotwostudentsinourschoolyesterdayafternoon.第8页第8页2.TianLiandDuanKaiwereridingbikessideby3.sideonthewayhomeafterschool.Theywere4.talkingandlaughingloudly.(陈蝉陈蝉)TianLiandDuanKaiwereridingbikessidebysideonthewayhomeafterschool,talkingandlaughingloudly.（用分词合并）（用分词合并）第9页第9页3.Thetrafficlightsturnedred.Theyfoundit4.wastoolatetostopthebikes.Thelightsturnedred,buttheyfounditwastoolatetostoptheirbikes.(黄颖黄颖)（用连接词连接）（用连接词连接）Seeingtheredtrafficlights,theytriedtostopbutitwastoolate.（用分词合并）（用分词合并）第10页第10页4.Onesleftarmwashurtandtheotherslegwashurttoo.(戴靓戴靓)Onesleftarmwasbrokenwhiletheothersleggothurt.(边昶边昶)(避免用相同结构和词汇）（高级连词）避免用相同结构和词汇）（高级连词）Onehadhisleftarmbrokenwhiletheothergothisleghurt./theotherwasbadlyhurtintheleg.)(高级结构）高级结构）Theywereknockedofftheirbikes,onewiththeleftarmbroken,andtheotherwithoneleghurt.(高级介词短语高级介词短语/独立主格结构）独立主格结构）(昭昭昭昭)第11页第11页5.Ifwedontobeytrafficrules,wemightdie.a.Ifwegoagainsttrafficrules,wemightloseourlives.b.Ifwegoagainsttrafficrules,wemightendupinhospital.c.Goingagainsttrafficrulesmightcostusourlives.d.Dontriskourlivesgoingagainsttrafficrules.(各种表示）各种表示）第12页第12页6.Hegotupat7oclock.（使用各种句式使用各种句式使用各种句式使用各种句式）Itwasnotuntil7oclockthathegotup.Notuntil7oclockdidhegetup.(强调句）强调句）（倒装句）（倒装句）Hedidntgetupuntil7oclock.第13页第13页1.Ihadagoodidea.a.Agoodideaoccurredtome.b.Icameupwithagoodidea.2.Dontworry.Welltrytohelpyou.makeeveryeffortto,makegreateffortstosparenoeffortsto,tryeverymeanstodoallwecanto,dowhatwecanto各种表示各种表示&高级词汇高级词汇第14页第14页Practice:1.Thereare80%ofthepopulationliveonfarming.2.At8thismorning,therewereabout50Americanstudentscametovisitourschool.80%ofthepopulationliveonfarming.At8thismorning,about50Americanstudentscametovisitourschool.第15页第15页Practice:（用分词合并）（用分词合并）1.Hehadfinishedhishomework.2.Hewentouttoplayfootball.3.2.Iwasmovedbyhiswords.Idecidedtolend3.himahand.Movedbyhiswords,Idecidedtolendhimahand.Havingfinishedhishomework,hewentouttoplayfootball.第16页第16页 Practice:（用连接词连接）（用连接词连接）1.Thepolicesearchedeverywhere.Themissing2.boycouldnotbefound.Thepolicesearchedeverywhere,butthemissingboycouldnotbefound.Thoughthepolicesearchedeverywhere,themissingboycouldnotbefound.第17页第17页Practice:(避免用相同结构和词汇）避免用相同结构和词汇）1.Ilikesports.Ilikemusic,too.a.Ilikesportsandmusicaswell.b.Ilikesportsaswellasmusic.2.MyfavoritesubjectisEnglishwhilemysistersfavoritesubjectishistory.a.MyfavoritesubjectisEnglishwhilemyb.sistersishistory.b.MyfavoritesubjectisEnglishwhilemysisterlikeshistorybest.第18页第18页Myoldgrandfatherfellasleepinthesofa.Hehadabookonhisknees.Practice:（用介词短语）（用介词短语）Myoldgrandfatherfellasleepinthesofawithabookonhisknees.第19页第19页提升句子档次小结：1.用分词短语合并句子 用介词短语合并句子 用独立主格结构合并句子 用连接词连接句子2.用高级结构和词汇3.用定语从句、主语从句、强调句、倒装句4.用不同结构和词汇第20页第20页An accident happened to two students in ourschoolyesterdayafternoon.Schoolwasover.TianliandDunkaifromGrade1weregoinghomebybike.Theyweretalkingandlaughinghappily.Whentheysawacarwhichwaspassingby,theystartedtorunafter it.They thought it was very interesting.Thebusstoppedwhenthetrafficlightturnedred.Thetwo students were very close to the bus and theycouldnt stop theirbikes in time.Theyfelloff thebikes.TianlibrokehisleftarmandDunkaihurthisleg.(学生作文）学生作文）第21页第21页An accident happened to two students in ourschool yesterday afternoon.School was over.TianliandDunkaifromGrade1weregoinghomebybike.They were talking and laughing happily.When they saw a bus which was passing by,theystarted to run after it.They thought it was veryinteresting.Thebusstoppedwhenthetrafficlightturnedred.Thetwostudentswereveryclosetothebusand theycouldntstoptheirbikesintime.Theyfelloffthebikes.TianlisbrokehishisleftarmandDunkaihurthisleg.第22页第22页Anaccidenthappenedtotwostudentsinourschoolyesterdayafternoon.Schoolwasover.TianliandDunkaifromGrade1weregoinghomebybike.Theyweretalkingandlaughinghappily.Anaccidentoccurredtotwostudentsinourschoolyesterdayafternoon.Afterschoolwasover,TianliandDunkaifromGrade1wereontheirwayhomebybike,talkingandlaughinghappily.第23页第23页Whentheyseeabuswhichwaspassingby,theystartedtorunafterit.Theythoughtitwasveryinteresting.Thebusstoppedwhenthetrafficlightturnedred.Seeingapassingcar,theystartedtochaseit,thinkingitgreatfun.Unfortunately,thebusstoppedthemomentthetrafficlightturnedred.第24页第24页Thetwostudentswereveryclosetothebusandtheycouldntstoptheirbikesintime.Theyfelloffthebikes.TianlisbrokehishisleftarmandDunkaihurthisleg.Thetwostudentsweresoclosetothebusthattheywerenotabletostoptheirbikesintime.Asaresult,theywereknockedoffthebikes,onewithhisleftarmbrokenandtheotherwithhisleghurt.第25页第25页Anaccidentoccurredtotwostudentsinourschoolyesterday afternoon.After school was over,TianliandDunkaifromGrade1wereheadinghomebybike,talkingandlaughinghappily.Seeingapassingbus,theystartedtochaseit,thinkingitwasgreatfun.Unfortunately,thebusstoppedthemomentthetrafficlightturnedred.Thetwostudentsweresoclosetothebusthattheywerenotabletostoptheirbikesintime.Asaresult,theywereknockedoffthebikes,onewithhisleftarmbrokenandtheotherwithhisleghurt.(95words)第26页第26页NowstudentsinChinacelebratetheirbirthdaysinmanyways.Usually,apartyisheld.Bestfriendsandrelativeswillcometotheparty.Theyusuallybuyagift.Theyshowtheirbestwishes.Sometimes,peoplesendshortmessagestooanditisbecomingverypopular.ButIthinkthatitsbettertohelpotherpeople.Weknowthatitsimportanttolearntohelpotherpeople.Helpingotherpeoplecandousalotofgood.PeoplewillhelpyoubecauseyouvehelpedthemandyoullbehappyImprove this composition,try!Improve this composition,try!第27页第27页(1)NowstudentsinChinacelebratetheirbirthdaysinmanyways.(2)Usually,apartyisheld.Bestfriendsandrelativeswillcometotheparty.（用（用where定语从句）定语从句）(3)Theyusuallybuyagift.Theyshowtheirbestwishes.（和并句子）（和并句子）(4)Sometimes,peoplesendshortmessagestooanditisbecomingverypopular（用（用which定语从句）定语从句）.(5)But(替换）替换）Ithink（替换）（替换）thatitsbettertohelpotherpeople.(6)Weknowthatitsimportanttolearntohelpothers.Helpingotherpeoplecandousalotofgood.(7)Peoplewillhelpyouinreturnandyoullbehappy（用（用Foronething,Foranother替换）替换）.NowadaysstudentsinChinacelebratetheirbirthdaysinvariousways.Usually,apartyisheldwherebestfriendsaswellasrelativescangettogetherandhavefun.Theyusuallybuyasmallgiftwithwhichtoexpresstheirbestwishes.Sometimes,peoplesendshortmessagestoo,whichisbecomingverypopular.However,asfarasImconcerned,itsbettertodosomethingforothers.Asisknowntoall,itsofimportancetohelpothers.Helpingothersononesbirthdaycanbenotonlymeaningfulbutalsodoyoualotofgood.Foronethingpeoplewillhelpyouinreturn;foranother,youllgethappinessoutofthat.第28页第28页NowadaysstudentsinChinacelebratetheirbirthdaysinvariousways.Usually,apartyisheldwherebestfriendsaswellasrelativescangettogetherandhavefun.Theyusuallybuyasmallgiftwithwhichtoexpresstheirbestwishes.Sometimes,peoplesendshortmessagestoo,whichisbecomingverypopular.However,asfarasImconcerned,itsbettertodosomethingforothers.Asisknowntoall,itsofimportancetohelpothers.Helpingothersononesbirthdaycanbenotonlymeaningfulbutalsodoyoualotofgood.Foronethingpeoplewillhelpyouinreturn;foranother,youllgethappinessoutofthat.Inshort,thebestwaytocelebrateourbirthdaysistohelpothers.第29页第29页Thank you!第30页第30页