高考英语书面表达howtopolishyourwriting省公共课一等奖全国赛课获奖课件.pptx

TO POLISH YOUR WRITING让你作文让你作文 起来起来Xiamen Yingcai School Xie Jianchun书面表示评讲之书面表示评讲之:第第1页页高级词汇与高级句式润色升级高级词汇与高级句式润色升级 一、使用高级词汇一、使用高级词汇 写作时，写作时，“高级词汇高级词汇”如能利用贴切自然，如能利用贴切自然，哪怕整篇文章只用上一两个，也会为你作文哪怕整篇文章只用上一两个，也会为你作文增添色彩。增添色彩。第第2页页 1标新立异标新立异 写作时要恰当得体地使用一些蕴含感情色彩，他人有写作时要恰当得体地使用一些蕴含感情色彩，他人有 可能想不到词汇，恰当地求新求异。可能想不到词汇，恰当地求新求异。We all have the same chance.We all possess the same chance(opportunity)We have a lot of homework to do at the weekend.We have endless homework to do at the weekend.第第3页页2短语优先短语优先 多使用词组、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采。多使用词组、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采。I can no longer bear the way he speaks to us.I can no longer put up with the way he speaks to us.The boy realized the danger and began to run away.The boy was aware of the danger and began to run away.第第4页页3防止重复防止重复尽可能防止过多地使用某一个单词，必要时选择使用尽可能防止过多地使用某一个单词，必要时选择使用其它恰当同义词或词组来代替。其它恰当同义词或词组来代替。I like reading while my brother likes watching football matches.I like reading while my brother enjoys watching football matches.二、使用高级句式，让句子靓起来二、使用高级句式，让句子靓起来1恰当使用被动语态恰当使用被动语态Above all,we must do something to stop pollution.Above all,something must be done to stop pollution.第第5页页2使用强调句使用强调句The accident happened the other day.The accident did happen the other day.He didnt come to the party because he was very busy.It was because he was very busy that he didnt come to the party.第第6页页3使用倒装句使用倒装句We can only improve our English in this way.Only in this way can we improve our English.We dont know its value until we lose health.Not until we lose health do we know its value.4使用省略句使用省略句Although they were faced with many problems,they didnt lose heart.Although faced with many problems,they didnt lose heart.第第7页页5使用感叹句使用感叹句We had a very good time with the peasants that day.What a good time we had with the peasants that day!6使用使用with复合结构复合结构Because there was too much noise,I couldnt go on studying.With the noise going on,I couldnt go on studying.第第8页页7使用虚拟语气使用虚拟语气I didnt take his advice,so I failed in the exam.If I had taken his advice,I wouldnt have failed in the exam.Its time for us to take measures to protect the wild animals.Its high time that we took measures to protect the wild animals.第第9页页福建省质检书面表示福建省质检书面表示国外某网站举行新一轮网上讲座活动，正国外某网站举行新一轮网上讲座活动，正面向全球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华面向全球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华中学学生李华，经常访问该网站。现请你中学学生李华，经常访问该网站。现请你用英文给该网站发送一封电子邮件，向其用英文给该网站发送一封电子邮件，向其推荐话题。内容包含推荐话题。内容包含:自我介绍自我介绍 写信目标写信目标 话题：我们应该感恩（话题：我们应该感恩（thankful).推荐理由推荐理由 预祝活动成功预祝活动成功注意：注意：1.词数词数100左右左右;2.邮件格式已为你给邮件格式已为你给出；出；3.邮件出不能出现本人信息；邮件出不能出现本人信息；4.在答题卡上在答题卡上作答。作答。第第10页页Three pieces of a students work(学生作品）学生作品）13分分13分分第第11页页16分分第第12页页23分分第第13页页WHAT MAKES A GOOD PIECE OF WRITING?1.neat writing书写书写2.content内容内容3.structure结构结构4.language语言语言Good first impressionWell organized and smoothly developedEverything required includedNo ChinglishNo Grammatical mistakes exactly used words and relatively changed sentence patterns第第14页页应用文写作五部曲应用文写作五部曲step1 Topic exploring 审题审题step2 Wording 构词构词step3 Sentence making 成句成句step4 Essay writing 成篇成篇step5 Improving 修订修订第第15页页Step1 Topic exploring审题审题 1 审体裁审体裁 2 审人称审人称3 审时态审时态4 审关键点审关键点(定文章结构定文章结构)第第16页页高考书面表示（重庆卷）高考书面表示（重庆卷）国外某网站举行新一轮网上讲座活动，正面向全国外某网站举行新一轮网上讲座活动，正面向全球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华中学学生李华，球中学生征集话题。假设你是新华中学学生李华，经常访问该网站。现请你用英文给该网站发送一经常访问该网站。现请你用英文给该网站发送一封电子邮件，向其推荐话题。内容包含封电子邮件，向其推荐话题。内容包含:自我介绍自我介绍 写信目标写信目标 话题：我们应该感恩（话题：我们应该感恩（thankful).推荐理由推荐理由 预祝活动成功预祝活动成功注意：注意：1.词数词数100左右左右;2.邮件格式已为你给出；邮件格式已为你给出；3.邮件出不能出现本人信息；邮件出不能出现本人信息；4.在答题卡上作答。在答题卡上作答。Paragraph 1:purpose of the letterParagraph 2:key pointsParagraph 3：Proper ending （to wish him a success)第第17页页三段式三段式总总分分总总自我介绍自我介绍写信目写信目话题（我们应该感恩）话题（我们应该感恩）列举理由列举理由预祝活动成功预祝活动成功in briefin detailin brief第第18页页Step2 Wording构词构词拼写拼写 词性词性近义词近义词 同音词同音词单复数单复数 冠词冠词大小写大小写 Simple mistakesleave a bad impression!第第19页页 My name is Li Hua.I am a student and I study in XinHua Middle School.I often visit your web,and from it I know you are finding themes from students all over the world.Now,I write this letter because I want to recommand a theme.We should thankful is a good topic.Our father and mother throw thick and thin raise us,we should be thankful to them.Our teachers teach us how to study,leading a lot of knowledge into our head.we should thank to them.as a Chinese,we should be thankful,because where there is thankful,therere hopes to make the world better,and with a thankful heart,we can realize how beautiful life is.I really hope you can choose my theme.I wish the activity will have an successful end.beaAslooking for topicsrecommendtopictopicthrough thick and thinthankfulness17分分第第20页页Lets work on polishing your writing together!Diverse topic-related chunksVarious sentence patternsHOW?From 17/18 to 21第第21页页HOW?1.改变词性来丰富表示改变词性来丰富表示2.添加句型添加句型/高级词汇（短语，高中阶段词汇）高级词汇（短语，高中阶段词汇）3.简单句简单句复合句复合句/长短句长短句第第22页页step3 Sentencing 成句成句1 简单句简单句2 并列句并列句3 复合句复合句4 非谓语形式非谓语形式5 特殊结构特殊结构时态，语态时态，语态别忘了并列连词别忘了并列连词No Chinglish!连词选择连词选择主语一致主语一致避生就熟！避生就熟！强调句型；倒装；强调句型；倒装；独立主格结构独立主格结构第第23页页1.My name is Li Hua.I am a student and I study in XinHua Middle School.2.I often visit your web,and from it I know you are looking for topics from students all over the world.I am Li hua,a student from Xin Hua Middle school.Improve your sentences.I often visit your website,where I got the news that youre looking for topics from students all over the world.1.My name is Li Hua.I am a student and I study in XinHua Middle School.2.I often visit your web,and from it I know you are looking for topics from students all over the world.第第24页页1.We should thankful is a good theme.2.Our father and mother through thick and thin raise us,we should be thankful to them.3.Our teacher teaches us how to study,leading a lot of knowledge into our head,we should thank to them.4.Only with a thankful heart,we can realize how beautiful life is.5.I really hope you can choose my theme.6.I wish the activity will have a successful end.Have a try!第第25页页1.We should be thankful is a good topic.That we should be grateful is a good idea.第第26页页2.Our father and mother through thick and thin raise us,we should be thankful to them.It is our parents who brought us up through thick and thin,so we should thank them.第第27页页3.Our teachers teach us how to study,leading a lot of knowledge into our head.we should thank them.We owe our teachers thanks,for we couldnt be who we are now without their hard work.第第28页页4.As a Chinese,we should be thankful,and only with a thankful heart,we can realize how beautiful life is.Thankfulness is also our traditional Chinese virtue.Only with a thankful heart can we fully realize how beautiful life is.第第29页页5.I really hope you can choose my topic.I would really appreciate it if my topic is chosen.Hopefully,my topic will be chosen.第第30页页6.I wish the activity will have an successful end.Wish the activity a great success.May your activity succeed.第第31页页Step4 essay writing成篇成篇 That we should be thankful is a good idea.It is our parents who brought us up through thick and thin,so we should thank them.We owe our teachers thanks,for we couldnt be who we are now without their hard work.Thankfulness is also our traditional Chinese virtue.Where there is thankfulness,there are hopes to make the world better.Only with a thankful heart,can we fully realize how beautiful life is.In my opinionFirstlyBesidesWhatsmoreNecessary conjunctions make a pieces a writing more smoothly developed.第第32页页应用文写作五部曲应用文写作五部曲step1 Topic exploring 审题审题step2 Wording 构词构词step3 Sentence making 成句成句step4 Essay writing 成篇成篇step5 Improving 修订修订draft (初稿）初稿）第第33页页1.Collect god words/phrases/sentences;2.Read more;3.Practice makes perfect;4.Be confident anytime.Now,Lets check whether our writing has been improved in content,structure and language?我们文章我们文章亮亮起来了么起来了么？第第34页页 Im Lihua,a student from Xin Hua Middle School.I often visit your website,where I got the wonderful news that youre looking for topics from students all over the world.Here,Im writing to recommend one.In my opinion,that we should be thankful is a good idea.Firstly,it is our parents who brought us up through thick and thin,so we should thank them.Besides,we owe our teachers thanks,for we couldnt be who we are now without their hard work.Whats more,thankfulness is also our traditional Chinese virtue.Where there is thankfulness,there are hopes to make the world better.Only with a thankful heart,can we fully realize how beautiful life is.Hopefully,my topic will be chosen.Wish the activity a great success.23分分第第35页页写作练习 假如你是大学一年级新生李华，开学之初，你英语老师Ms.Li希望了解每位学生英语学习情况，并征讨教学提议。请按以下关键点用英语给她写一封信。1.对英语学习认识；2.自己当前英语水平；3.自己英语学习存在主要问题；4.对英语教学两点提议。注意：1.词数100左右；2.信开头和结尾已给出。1.审题：任务、人称、时态审题：任务、人称、时态2.构思：整理内容关键点构思：整理内容关键点、做到心中有做到心中有数数第第36页页Thank you！第第37页页