导学案：浙江考试说明读后续写-Arther.doc

(完整word)导学案：浙江考试说明读后续写 Arther读后续写(一)故事：A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. -一、写前分析:1. 原文所给关键词分类:地点：Park Avenue， the bank人物：The young man， people， the bank thief事件:suitcases， in the back seat, loud noise of an alarm, robbery， the shouts思考:Which are the key words that stand for the most important information, the main character and the main object should be chosen in your writing?_2。 在续写时，除了注意原文给出的关键词，还需要注意文本中以下线索：1) Why did the young man look worried?2) What happened to the young man？ (But everyone had a different answer。)3) Arthur became frightened and without another thought， he started to run。3。 一定注意两段开头所给的句子里有什么线索或者限定，甚至是句子是否完整。Para1：As he was running， Arthur heard the young man shouting behind， “Stop， stop!”Characters： _ Actions: _该段落中不必出现过多人物,以免混乱。Para2：The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur （本句不完整)根据句中提到_和_，说明上一段故事中应该涉及到_,否则该段落的开头出现得很突兀，跟上文不能进行很好的衔接。4. 分析文章体裁是什么？语言有什么特点？故事的基调是什么？故事情节发展如何？故事会有什么结局？5。 构思续写内容。Para1：What are the main characters in this paragraph？What happened to them? Para2:What did Arthur want to do at the police station？How about the young man？What happened at the police station? 6. 故事结局，兼顾开头的funny一词。结局应该是surprising 或者interesting。二、应注意的问题以及存在的问题1、应根据该类写作的特点和要求，定语气,定基调,定线索,定结局。2、文章必须以根据指定的段落开头进行续写，只写两段。3、故事情节一定要简单明了，过于复杂并不能得高分。太多对话并不能交代太多信息。不要重复上文已经交代的内容。4、对动作、语言、表情、心理和环境等进行描写一定要与情景吻合。如：到了警察局后，主人公应该是rushed / raced into the police station, 如果写成walked into-,就显得与情景不符.再如：jump into the taxi 要比get into the taxi更符合语境。5、情节上要有连贯性，逻辑性，合理性；语言要符合文章题材特点，要有丰富的词汇和句式，要恰当使用连接词。6、写完后一定别忘了给关键词加下划线。7.有没有必要描写司机的心理活动?有没有必要增加别的重要人物？三、语言表达：1。 认为-是-2。 rob 和steal的用法：3. thief theft robber robbery 4. 赶上某人 5. 上了出租车6. 注意句群。逗号不能连接两个句子！四、优美句子： 1。 Arthur looked back over his shoulder only to find that Arthur was running after him。 He became increasingly frightened and ran as fast as possible。 At this time， he flagged down a taxi(挥手拦下） and put the suitcase in the back seat. (语言很丰富） 刘文馨 142. Hearing this, Arthur immediately realized that the young man was the bank thief。3。 Out of breath， Arthur said to the taxi driver, “Please go to the Police Station as soon as possible。 I have a robbery to report to the policeman. 4。 The moment the taxi driver got the request, he drove straight to the police station without hesitation。5。 Arthur was under arrest， and he had no alternative but to follow the policemen to the police station.（5 孙铭晗）7. Arthur was too frightened to stop， with the loud noise of an alarm and the shouts of people around his ears. To his surprise，a taxi pulled over in the distance, so he raced to it, put the suitcases in the back seat and asked the driver to drive to the police station without hesitation. （ 5 刘启萌)8. Nervous and scared, he ran faster in order to avoid being caught by the young man. “He might be the bank thief！” Arthur thought to himself。 To give the police suitcase as soon as possible, he stopped a taxi， telling the driver that the man running after him had stolen money from the bank. （5 孙晨仪）9. Almost terrified to death / Overwhelmed with fear， Arthur had no alternative but to run。 Fortunately, he found a taxi and got into it as quickly as possible。 （ 5 田怡然， 3高小可 ）12。 Without a second thought, he jumped into the taxi, carrying the suitcases. ( 3 王雅)13. He was so scared that he couldnt calm down; as a result， he ran faster than before。 “I have no option but to run since I have been involved in this case although I am innocent。” Arthur thought to himself. (3 袁鑫宇）五、参考范文点评 1As he was running， Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” Thinking of the way the young man had behaved， he realized the young man might be the bank robber. （描述了心理活动，还用了分词做状语) So Arthur stopped a taxi。 The moment he got into the taxi, he told the driver the man shouting behind was the bank thief and asked him to drive to the nearest police station to report the robbery。 (写出来去下一个场景的目的，跟下一段进行了很好的衔接.The moment是连词引导时间状语从句) The driver followed what Arthur said and raced away.The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur thanked the driver and directly rushed in。 Just as Arthur was describing what had happened nearthe bank on thePark Avenue and reported the young man to the police， he heard a voice outside， “Help! Help!” To Arthurs surprise, it was the young man。 He had followed Arthur in another taxi。 It turned out that the young man was innocent and inside the suitcase were just some clothes。 Arthur felt embarrassed but the policemen thanked him anyway. （结尾与前面的铺垫吻合，并且语言丰富) (Words： 159） 六、同学习作点评：As he was running， Arthur heard the young man shouting behind， “Stop， stop！” Arthur began to run faster and realized that the young man was right the bank thief. He stopped a taxi and jumped into it as quickly as he could。 He told the driver to drive to the police station located in the east of the Park Avenue. In no time the taxi drove away from the shouts of the young man。 Arthur thought the suitcase might be filled with the money robbed from the bank .The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur saw the young man had already been there with some policemen. Arthur asked， “Why are you here？” The young man answered angrily， “Why did you run the minute you heard the loud noise of an alarm？ I have nothing to do with the bank robbery。 What are in the suitcase are just some clothes and I have to be at the airport by ten, but it is eleven oclock now. Arthur felt embarrassed and said sorry to the young man. 丁怡丹 19（这篇续写思路清晰，前后连贯，逻辑性很强，老师评分22分)As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop， stop! From the shouts of the people in front of the bank， he was convinced that the young man was the bank thief。 Therefore， he stopped a taxi and jumped into it, asking the driver to drive to the nearest police station immediately。The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur rushed straight into the station with the suitcase in his hand。 The moment he wanted to tell the policeman what had happened, the young man arrived there. Out of breath， the young man explained that he was absolutely not involved in the robbery and he opened the suitcase. It turned out that there were just some books and clothes in it. Arthur sighed with relief although he felt very embarrassed. 刘闯 7 (老师点评：这个续写作文情节比较简单，思路清晰，语言准确丰富，老师评分23分.）