小学五、六年级英语作文范例(2).doc

小学英语五年级上册各单元作文范例及点评
My English Teacher
    Miss Tang is my English teacher. She’s very pretty. She is tall and thin. She has two big eyes and a small mouth. Her hair is long. She likes cats very much. And she likes singing and dancing, too. Her English is very good. We often play games in English classes. She is very kind to us. We all love her.
【要领点评】
    这篇作文的题目是“我的英语老师”，是一篇介绍人物的作文。小作者开门见山，直接点题，首先介绍了英语老师的姓名，然后逐一介绍了她的外貌特征、喜好、英语水平、上课特点以及师生情感等。
小朋友们在写作文时，要注意使用自己最熟悉的词[组]，以免写出一些错句子。写作时要注意意思连贯、语句通顺、标点正确、书写清晰、规范等。

My Days of the week
    I’m a student and I am in Grade 5.I get up at six o’clock every day. I have breakfast at half past six, and go to school at seven o’clock. I have classes from Monday to Saturday. I have an English class on Friday and I have a PE class on Tuesday. I don’t have to go to school on school, and I like to go swimming on that day.
【要领点评】
     这篇作文的题目是“我的一周”，小作者没有说一些空话，而是从自己的亲身经历写起，叙述了自己一周七天的所作所为，并特别强调了星期天的喜好，写得自然、流畅。
     小朋友们写作文时要注意人称及谓语动词的变化，要依据提示，结合自己的实际，写自己身边熟悉的事情。

My Favourite Food
     Do you know what this is?  Guess! Its colour is yellow. It’s long and thin. It looks like a small boat and crescent. Oh, it is a banana. Do you know what that is? Guess again! Its colour is orange. It’s round. It looks like a small ball and a small lantern. Oh, it is an orange. I like then a lot. I like ice-creams. I like to chew gum. Chocolates and candies are yummy. I like them very much.
     How about you? What’s your favourite food?
【要领点评】
     My Favourite Food 是一篇很成功的文章，小作者并不是简单地列举出自己最喜欢的每一种食物，而是有详有略地进行介绍。整篇文章用词准确、语言流畅、没有语法错误。另外，文章中出现了一些生词，可见小作者是用心查字典了。

I can help do housework
I am a girl. My name is Li Ling. I’m in Class Three, Grade Five. I’m   helpful at home. I can water the flowers, empty the trash and sweep the floor. After meals, I can help my mother do the dishes. On Sunday, I can wash the clothes. What about you? Are you helpful, too?
【要领点评】
     本篇作文的题目是“我可以帮助做家务”，作者主要叙述自己在家帮助做的事情，介绍自己的名字，所在年级及在家能做的家务，很详细，到位。
     小朋友们在写作时，应尽量写一些亲自经历的事情，这样会避免在作文时显得太空，因为只有自己经常做的事情印象才会特别深刻。写作时还要注意大小写和时态。

In The Kitchen
     This is the kitchen of my family. It’s big and nice. Look! My mother is cooking in it. This is a microwave and that is a stove. There is a big table here. There are many things on it. What are these? They look yummy! Oh, they’re strawberries. And what are those? They are grapes.
【要领点评】
     这篇作文的题目是“在厨房”里，作者根据自己家的厨房情况。介绍厨房里有微波炉和电炉，有一张大桌子和桌子上的物品等，以及妈妈在做饭，非常真实。
      小朋友们，可以从观察自己身边的事、物写起，利用所学的句子，描述身边熟悉的东西来训练习作。

My Village
     My village is very beautiful. There are many houses in the village. Near the village, there is a forest. A small river is in front of the village. The water in it is very clean. We can see some fish in the river. Near the river, you can see a mountain. Some flowers and grass are on the mountain. I like my village. Welcome to my village!

【要领点评】
     本文以“我的村庄”为题描述了自己家乡的风景。介绍了村庄的房屋、森林、河流及大山，使人看了这篇作文后确实感觉到“我的村庄”的美丽。小朋友们在写作时，可仔细想一下自己的村庄或所在城市的特点，尽量使用本单元学过的单词或短语进行叙述。

小学英语五年级下册各单元作文范例及点评
My weekend
    There are two days on the weekend, Saturday and Sunday. On Saturday, I often go to my dancing class in the morning and do my homework in the afternoon, and I often help my mother do some cleaning. On Sunday, I always visit my grandparents in the morning and do some reading in the afternoon. After dinner, I often watch TV with my parents. At that time, we can talk with each other and say something happily. We often have a good time.
【要领点评】
写法：这篇习作是按照时间顺序记叙周末的活动，记叙了周六和周日的上午和下午分别做了哪些活动及对活动的感受。即：周六上午：舞蹈课→下午：做作业和帮妈妈做清洁→周日上午：看望祖父母→下午：阅读→晚上：看电视，与父母交流→感受：高兴和愉快。我们还可以选取周六和周日中的几个比较主要的活动来写，先说明什么时间在什么地方由什么人做了什么事，有什么感受。再按照活动顺序把活动内容写清楚，最后抒发一下对这次活动或这个周末的感想。
时态：这篇短文我们可以用三种时态来写: a.一般过去时（主要描述你上个周末是怎样度过的）;b.一般现在时（主要描述你经常怎样度过周末）;c.一般将来时（主要描述你要怎样过周末）。这里我们来表述平时是如何过周末的，所以采用一般现在时来写。
注意：活动的相关表达方法可采用旧知识，eg.（例）起床get up，和新知识，eg. Climb mountains去爬山中的un很容易错写成nu。还要注意不要出现病句，eg. “I often watch TV with my parents.”不要写成 “I often with my parents watch TV .” 词量上控制在50 ~ 80 之间。

My Seasons
    We have four seasons in a year. I can do many interesting things in each season. In spring, the weather is cool and wind, I can fly kites when it’s wind. And I can go hiking with my family when it’s sunny and cool. I like hiking. Summer is hot in the north of China, but it’s not long time. I often go swimming. It can make me healthy and strong. I can also wear my beautiful dresses. Fall is a season with harvest. And I can eat delicious fruits in this season. I can watch the leaves fall. Winter comes, it’s often snowy in winter in my hometown. When it snows, everything is white. We can play with snow and make a snowman, skate and ski. And winter is my favourite season, because of the Spring Festival. I love seasons. I love the nature.
【要领点评】
写法：这篇短文是描述“我的四季”，在写法上，是根据春、夏、秋、冬四季的更替来写的，先讲明每个季节的特征，之后再写在这个季节中的主要活动或比较有代表性的活动。同时讲一些自己的真实感受，最后阐述自己最喜欢的季节。在实际的写作的时候我们还可以先写出自己喜爱的季节及主要的活动内容，之后再去讲其他几个季节，还可以多讲解一下地域的季节特征和大自然中的其他景色，如：秋天的田地里一片金黄，农民在收割等等，这样写出来的四季更贴近实际。
时态：这篇习作讲的是“我的四季”，是比较惯常的一些行为，所以我们最好采用一般现在时和情态动词结合活动的写法。即：在什么季节，天气如何，我们可以做什么。
注意：在写作内容上，不可以像以往的内容那么简单，因为有四个季节，所以要写明季节，季节天气，季节性活动，活动的人，活动的感受等，要求句子顺序要正确，在写作中还要注意关联词的使用，如用了“因为”，就不能用“所以”，二者不可以同时出现。词量要控制在80个词以内。

My Birthday Party
    Every year, when it’s birthday, my parents hold a party for me. They invite my friend to come to my house to celebrate my birthday. I can get many beautiful gifts every year.
In my party, we can do many things:
1.    Light the candles.
2.    Sing a “Happy Birthday” song.
3.    Make a wish.
4.    Blow out the candles.
5.    Cut off the cake.
6.    Eat the cake.
7.    Open the presents.
8.    Sing and dance.
9.    Watch videos or play other games.
10. Say goodbye with each other.
That’s my birthday party, is it interesting?
【要领点评】
写法：这篇习作是按活动的顺序来写的，记叙了生日晚会的各项具体活动，比较全面。比较以前几个单元的写作写法，这个短文按活动顺序比较合适。
时态：这篇短文可以用三种时态来写：
1、一般将来时：主要说明生日晚会份的各项计划，都将如何进行。
2、一般现在时：主要说明习惯上如何度过每个生日。
3、一般过去时：主要说明你的生日晚会是如何进行的。
句型：invite sb. to do sth. 邀请某人做某事
注意：由于这篇短文很有局限性，所表达的大体上都基本相同，所以在书写的时候要注意结合自己的实际活动与真情实感去写。另外注意一些短语和单词的书写不要发生错误：
eg.“吹蜡烛”要写成“blow out the candles”而不能写成“blow candles”。
My family
    There are five people in my family. They are my grandma, grandpa, dad, mom and I. Look! Grandma is watching TV. Grandpa is reading a book. Dad is writing an e-mail. Mom is cooking dinner. I am doing my homework. I love my family!

【要领点评】
写法：这篇习作介绍了自己家的家庭成员，以及此刻他们正在干什么，表达了自己对家人的感情。
时态：由于本单元主要讲的是现在进行时态，所以建议采用现在进行时态。
句型：主语+be+动词的现在分词。
注意：本单元的重点是现在进行时态，注意在写句子时要保持时态的完整性，即系动词和动词的ing缺一不可。

In the park
    It is sunny today .My mother, my father and I are going to the park. We like the park very much. It is very big and beautiful .There are many trees and flowers in it. Many people like to go there. Look! An old man is sitting on the chair. He is reading a book carefully. Two boys are jumping on the ground. Their mothers are talking with each other. Two birds are flying in the sky. The ducks are swimming in the river. They are very happy. What is the cat doing? Oh, it is running after a mouse. It’s a poor mouse.
【要领点评】
写法：这篇习作是用现在进行时描绘出公园里的人和动物们正在进行的活动还运用了一般现在时叙述了公园美丽的景色。
时态：这篇文章可以采用一般现在时和现在进行时两种时态，由于本单元的语法项目是现在进行时，因此，描述的重点要放在现在进行时态上。
句型：一般现在时：主语+谓语+其他
现在进行时：（1）What +be (am,is ,are)+主语+v.-ing+其他?
（2）主语+be(am,is ,are)+ v.-ing+其他。

A Field Trip
    It is a nice day. Our class will have a field trip today. The classmates are very excited.
Look! Here we are. There’re a lot of activities to do. Amy is watching insects. Peter is collecting leaves. They want to write a report. Mandy is catching butterflies in the woods. Tim and Bob are playing chess. Some of the classmates are having a picnic. There is a lot of delicious food to eat. Oh, who’s that over there? It’s Miss White. What is she doing? She is taking photos. We had a very good time. I’ll never forget this field trip.

【要领点评】
写法：这篇习作是按照郊游时的画面来描述的，记叙了同学们分别在郊游中做了哪些活动及郊游的感受。
时态：这篇文章可以用一般过去时和现在进行时来写。由于本单元主要讲的是现在进行时，所以，这里我们采用现在进行时比较合适。
句型：××. is/are doing sth. She /He is doing sth. They’re doing sth.
注意：活动的相关表述法采用新旧知识相结合去写。注意时态的转换、描写感受时用一般现在时。

PEP小学英语六年级上册各单元作文范例及点评
Li Ying ’S Hobby
    Li Ying likes English very much. She works hard at it. She reads English every morning. She likes speaking English. She often listens to the radio. She watches TV only on Saturday evening.
    Does she like dancing? No, she doesn’t. But she likes drawing and singing. Her parents love her. And all the teachers and her friends like her, too. She says her hobbies make her happy.
【要领点评】
    这一篇写爱好的文章,小作者的写作思路很值得我们学习,他没有具体写到刘莹的某一种爱好,而是从学习到课余的多种爱好入手,对刘莹的各种爱好进行了粗线条地勾画.从“爱好”这个角度来看刘莹的话，我们会觉得这个形象很饱满。
小朋友们写这种“叙事写人”作文时，可以从两个角度下手：一是具体地描绘；二是和上面小朋友一样，粗线条地勾画，二者各有所长，另处在行文中使用一些问句，使用一些转述的话，可以使作文更有灵气，避免了平铺直叙的缺点。比如上文的“Does she like dancing? No, she doesn’t.”和“she says her hobbies make her happy.”就是十分不错的句子，使读者眼前为之一亮。

Don’t be against the traffic rules
    I go to school from Monday to Friday .I go to school by bike at 7:30 in the morning .I must cross two busy roads .If the traffic light is red or yellow,I know I can’t cross the road ,so I wait.
    If the light turns green, I know it means “Go”, and then I walk across the road .I always ride on the right side of the road .I am never against the traffic rules.
【要领点评】
    这篇作文的题目是“不要违反交通规则”，小作者没有说一些空话，而是从自己的经历写起，叙述自己以什么方式去上学，在上学的路上是怎么做的，很形象。
小朋友们在作文时注意不要图大，那样很容易使文章显得空洞，而要写自己身边熟悉的事情。要注意行文中字母的大小写、句子的标点符号等。

I Love My Family
    Here is a photo lf my family. These are four people in my family. They are my father, my mother, my brother and I.
    My father is a doctor. He works in a hospital far away. He goes to work by subway. My mother is a teacher. She works in a school near my home. She goes to work by bike. After work, they like reading books. Who is the tall boy? He is my brother. He is five years older than me. He is a singer. He’s now in Beijing. He goes there by plane.
I love my family.
【要领点评】
    一个平凡的题材，一篇生动的作文。这样的命题，我们可能面对几次，甚至几十次了。但这位小朋友的笔端很是灵巧，了了数言，让一个幸福的家庭跃然纸上，很值得我们去思考，我们能做到吗？
小朋友的这篇作文除了语言优美之外，在结构上也有闪光之处。先总说，将自己的家人逐个介绍一遍，后分说，把家人的工作、上班方式，爱好一一细说。最后以一句话进行概括，起到点题的作用。我们在写类似的作文的时候是不是也可以借鉴呢？ 

How to get to the science museum
    We are going to the science museum tomorrow. There is an old thing show in the Museum. Do you know how we can get to the science museum?
    The science museum is next to the People’s Park. It’s isn’t far from our school. So we can go there on foot .Walk straight to the west from our school, next turn left at the post office and walk for about 5 minutes, then turn right at traffic lights. You can find the People’s Park on the right . Walk straight, and you’ll see the science museum.
【要领点评】
    这篇作文的题目是“怎样去科学博物馆”。怎样才算是一篇好作文呢？通过你的叙述，能让别人很容易找到博物馆，这应是最基本的要求。小作者在文中告诉我们什么呢？首先他写了去博物馆的位置，最后浓墨重彩，指明从学校去博物馆的具体路线，这条路线够清晰吧！
小朋友们在写这类作文的时候，总有些无从下手的感觉，不知从何说起。其实介绍路线，无非就是告诉他人某段路的起点和终点，还有就是如何从起点走到终点。要给他人说清楚，你自己首先得清楚，然后再通过自己的叙述，将路线清清楚楚得呈现出来。一定要注意行文中一些关键的地方，如在哪儿转弯，向哪儿转，经过哪些重要的交通标志或显眼的标志建筑等。这样，你就能说清，别人也能弄明白。

Planting Trees
    It’s spring. It’s time to plant trees.
    I want to plant a tree in our garden. Dad and Mum are very happy. They like green. Dad helps me plant the tree. First, we dig the soil. Then I put a little tree into the soil. Next I water it. I am so excited and I wait for the tree to grow. Two weeks later, my tree has some little leaves. I water it every day. Now it has lots of leaves. It grows fast.
We should plant more trees. They make our world beautiful.
【要领点评】
    小作者写了一次植树的经历，但他并没有单纯拘泥于植树的过程。既有过程，也有感觉，能使文章打动读者，给人以启发。作文的最后一段就非常好，两句话胜似千言万语。我们可以学习一下这种写法。
既描述过程，又适时提自己的看法或想法的写法，在作文中叫做“夹叙夹议”,描述过程为了提出一种思想服务，提出看法或想法使原本平实的描述有了意义。我们在以后的写作中也可以试一试。

Let’s have a nice day
    It’s Sunday tomorrow .I’m going to the bookstore with my friends tomorrow morning .We are going to look for some good books .We all like reading books .We are going to eat our lunch at the restaurant. I like chicken, beef and vegetables .After lunch, we are going to the Summer Palace by bus. We are going to play near the Kunming Lake. Maybe we are going to row a boat on the lake .Wow, that will be relaxing. We are coming back at 5pm.
【要领点评】
    怎样才称得上是“美好的一天”？有两点不能忘记，一是安排得充实，二是安排得有意义。这两点小作者无疑都想到了，上午去书店看书买书，中午在饭店吃饭，下午去颐和园玩耍、划船，丰富多彩！文章以时间为线索，叙述清楚，文笔也很优美。
小朋友们在写这种叙事的文章时，要尽量给读者交代好时间、地点、人物和活动等，使文章有血有肉。要看好是写过去发生的事情，还是现在正在做的事情，或计划、打算要做的事情，以选择适当的句型。如果是写将来的事情，那么就要注意在表述时多用“be  going  to+动词原形”这种句型。还有一点也很重要，那就是故事的线索要交代好，让读者在阅读时对整个过程一目了然。

PEP小学英语六年级下册各单元作文范例及点评
My friend and I
    I’ve got a lovely friend at school. His name is Jack. Jack is 12 years old now. I’m 11. He’s older than me. He’s 150 cm tall. I’m 148 cm. He’s taller and stronger. He’s 43 kg and I’m 41 kg. He’s heavier. We’ve got round faces and short hair. But my eyes are bigger and my legs are longer. Our favourite colours are white and blue. We like summer best. We both like sports, too. On Saturdays, we play table tennis. On Sundays, we play basketball. He’s good at basketball. But I do better at table tennis. We laugh and play together. How happy we are!

【要领点评】
写法：这篇作文的题目是“我的朋友和我”。既然写作范围是两个人物，就要笔墨均匀，两者缺一不可。不能只描写朋友，也不能只叙述我。这无形中增加了写作的难度。解决这个难点的关键是：找出两个人几方面的异同。可以通过常见的年龄、身高、体重、外貌、喜好等方面列举出每个人的具体实际情况，再进行比较，通过比较突出每个人物的特点。这样就把人物活灵活现的展现给读者了。
时态：像此类题目的作文，运用一般现在时即可。
句型：因为涉及两个人的比较，不要忘记使用比较级句型：A+be+比较级+than+B。
注意：在列举两个人的“体貌、喜好”等方面情况时，应一边列举，一边比较。不要一味指出不同，还要列举相同之处。两人能成为朋友，一定有共同语言和喜好，共性不容忽视。在表达喜好时，不同的句型应交叉运用，避免枯燥的重复。例“Our favourite colours are…”，“We like …best”，“We both like…,too”，为突出不同时间做不同运动，用“On Saturdays…”，“On Sundays…”，形成鲜明对比。常使用并列连词and 和转折连词 but ，使文章读起来更流畅。结尾以How happy we are!突出了两人从友谊中得到的快乐！

A Bad Cold
    I’m not feeling well today. I think I have a bad cold. I have a headache. I have a fever. My nose hurts. My throat is sore. I have to take some medicine and stay in bed. My parents will take me to the hospital. What a bad cold!
I hope I can be better soon. And I want to go to school.

【要领点评】
写法：这篇习作是按照时间顺序记叙了得病、病的症状、服药及治疗的全过程。写出了小作者希望快点康复，好去上学的愿望。
时态：这篇文章可以采用一般现在时来写。如果主语是第三人称单数，动词别忘加s。
句型：要用feel 加形容词，和表示“患某种疾病“的用法have+表示的疾病的单词。
注意：在表示疾病时，可以使用-ache,hurt 和sore。不要只用一个单词，以避免枯燥。要写出得病后的简单治疗及心情，不能只写得病的情况。常见病句：My nose is hurt。因为be后面要加形容词，而hurt是动词，因此应使用sore；东西放在床上要用on the bed。生病，是卧床不起，应该说stay in bed。
表示吃药时，通过用take some medicine，不用eat。
词汇量要控制在40~60之间。

Zoom’s Weekend
    Zoom had a busy weekend. On Saturday morning, he washed his clothes and went to a park. He did his homework and went fishing on Saturday afternoon. On Sunday morning, he cleaned his room and visited his grandparents. He played football and watch TV on Sunday afternoon. Zoom was too tired.

【要领点评】
写法：这篇习作是按时间顺序记叙了Zoom的周末活动。
时态：这篇文章可以用三种时态来写，由于本单元主要讲的是一般过去时态，所以我们采用一般过去时态比较合适。
句型：主语+动词过去式+过去时间。
注意：活动的相关表达法采用新旧知识结合的方法，但要注意动词过去式的拼写。

Tom’s Holiday
    Tom went to Beijing by plane on his holiday. Every day he had fun with his parents. They went to the Nature Park. They saw elephants. They went swimming. They ate lots of delicious food. They also took many beautiful pictures. They will come back home tomorrow. In a word, they