Howtopolishyourwriting11.pptx

如何让你的作文如何让你的作文“靓靓”起来起来石河子第二中学石河子第二中学 王慧杰王慧杰How to polish your compositionLearning goals1.To polish writing by using advanced words and sentences correctly and efficiently.(A)(B)19th CPC National Congress started on October 18th in Beijing.It is on October 18th that19th CPC National Congress started in Beijing.(强调句强调句)Task1:Which sentence is better?Why?(A)(B)He is a handsome boy.He always appears in my dream.He is a handsome boy who always appears in my dream.(定语从句定语从句)Which sentence is better?Why?(A)(B)Which sentence is better?Why?She masters both English and Chinese.She has a good command of both English and Chinese.高级短语高级短语(A)(B)Which sentence is better?Why?Their homework was finished,they felt happy.With their homework finished,they felt happy.(with复合结构复合结构)(A)(B)Which sentence is better?Why?(高级词汇高级词汇)The little girl did a good performance in Chinese Poetry Conference.The little girl did a wonderful performance in Chinese Poetry Conference.Surounded by fans,Zhao Liying had a photo taken.Zhao liying was surounded by fans.Zhao Liying had a photo taken.Which sentence is better?Why?(A)(B)(非谓语现在分词作伴随状语非谓语现在分词作伴随状语)We can use advanced words andsentences to make our writing more attractive.Polish our writingadvanced words advanced words and sentencesadvanced sentences advanced words and expressions Two ways Way 1:Advanced words and exprssions(1):Advanced expressions.(1):Advanced expressions.高级短语高级短语高级短语高级短语 I want an iphone 8.I _ an iphone 8.be eager/dying for;have a strong desire for;look forward to;(2):Advanced words.(2):Advanced words.高级词汇高级词汇高级词汇高级词汇It is good to go for a spring outing.It is _ to go for a spring outing.(enjoyable,beneficial,worthwhile)long for wonderful(3).Transformation of part of speech词性转换词性转换 It is important to have a short break from daily routine.It is of _ to have a short break.importance(4).Avoid repeating 避免重复避免重复Some students think that it s worthwhile to go for spring outing,while others think that it is a waste of time.Some students _ that it is worthwhile to go for a spring outing,while others _ that it is a waste of time.argue/insist/believeclaim/supposeWay1:advanced words and phrases;transformation of part of speech;avoid repeating；Task2:Beautify words and expressions by using words.1.He was so angry that she had forgotten his birthday.He was so _ that she had forgotten his birthday.2.A short break from routine will benefit our study.A short break from routine is _ our study.A short break from routine is _ our study.3.They are not satisfied with their academic results.Their academic results are beyond their _.4.It is obvious that a refreshed mind will handle your school work more efficiently._,a refreshed mind will handle your school work more efficiently.beneficial tosatisfactionannoyedObviously of benefit5.He spends all his spare time in reading.6.The Internet is playing a more and more important part in our life.7.He likes playing computer games.grow interested in;have a preference for;have an affection for;be keen on;He devotes all his spare time to readingThe Internet is playing an increasingly important part in our life.He is fond of playing computer games.8.We should use every minute to study English.We should make use of/take advantage of every minute to study English.9.The Internet lets us communicate with each other conveniently.The Internet enables us to communicate with each other conveniently.The Internet makes it possible for us to communicate with each other conveniently.10.Plenty of memory work is undoubtedly helpful to English study.Plenty of memory work will undoubtedly contribute to English study.强调句强调句倒装句倒装句 with复合结构复合结构定语从句定语从句名词性从句名词性从句非谓语动词非谓语动词感叹句感叹句Way 2:Advanced sentences How many advanced sentences have you learned？句式多样，文章增句式多样，文章增“靓靓”被动句被动句Task3:Beautify sentences：Discuss with your partner in 2ms.1.I like the novel.Its cover is fascinating.(定从定从)I like the novel whose cover is fascinating.She always sings while walking her dog.2.She always sings while she is walking her dog.（状从省略）（状从省略）3.You can solve this problem only in this way.（倒装句倒装句）Only in this way can you solve this problem.Way2:Advanced sentencesAs long as/If we study harder at English,we are bound to make progress.5.He is a helpful teacher!（感叹句）（感叹句）What a helpful teacher he is!/How helpful a teacher he is.6.We study harder at English.We are bound to make progress.(条件状语从句条件状语从句)4.My uncle was drunk.He soon found the car out of his control.(sothat句式句式)My uncle was so drunk that he soon found the car out of his control.8.When he spoke,he felt more and more excited.（用用the morethe more句型句型）The more he spoke,the more excited he felt.9.She came into the classroom.She was smiling.She came into the classroom,smiling,7.He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.(使用强调句型使用强调句型it be not until 被强调部分被强调部分 that.)It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that he knew what had happened.(非谓语现在分词作伴随状语非谓语现在分词作伴随状语)With the difficult task finished,I felt proud.10.The difficult task was finished.I felt proud(with复合复合结构结构)11.Although Im weak,I will make efforts.(表语表语as主系倒装主系倒装)Weak as I am,I will make efforts.12.We must take measures to stop pollution.(被动句被动句)Measures must be taken to stop pollution.Task4:Check yourself.Polish a paragraph by using your advanced words and sentences in your group in 5ms Our school is a modern school.It makes me very proud.Many students try their best to be admitted to key universities.I am a student in N2 senior high school.In the school I learn a lot from my teachers.I didnt know how to study English,until I was told by them.I can write better writings only In the way.Although my English is poor ,I have confidence in myself.Suggested answers:read it and discuss with your partners.1.（定语从句）（定语从句）:Our school is a modern school,which makes me very proud.2.A loA lot of/a quantity of/a great number of students spare no effort to be admitted to key universities.3.I am a student in N2 senior high school（定语从（定语从句）句）where I learned a lot from my teachers.4.not until 强调句）强调句）It was not until I was told by them that I knew the ways to study English.5.(使用倒装句使用倒装句)Only In that way can I make better writings.6.Poor as my English is ,I have confidence in it.Im Li Hua.I have learned that there will be held a Chinese paper-cutting exhibition.Its subject is about Chinese festivals.Knowing that you like Chinese traditional culture,I am writing the e-mail to invite you to visit the exhibition.The exhibition will be held in the museum from 9a.m.to 7pm.on June 15th.It will last for only one day.The works of paper-cutting artists from all over China will be showed.You will be surprised.Therefore,in the exhibition,you can enjoy the skills of these paper-cutting artists,when you are getting to know more about the customs of our Chinese traditional festivals from these beautiful works.It is useful and valuable for you.You want to come there.Please contact me.Task 5：2017高考全国2卷作文Im Li Hua.I have learned that there will be held a Chinese paper-cutting exhibition whose subject is about Chinese festivals.（定从）（定从）Knowing that you are fond of/are keen on/have a preference for Chinese traditional culture,(短语优先短语优先)I am writing the e-mail to invite you to pay a visit to(词性转换词性转换)the exhibition.The exhibition will be held in the museum from 9a.m.to 7pm.on June 15th which will last for only one day.（定从定从）On that day,with the works of paper-cutting artists from all over China to show，you will be surprised(with 复合结构复合结构).Therefore,in the exhibition,you can enjoy the skills of these paper-cutting artists,when getting to know more about the customs of our Chinese traditional festivals from these beautiful works.（省略状语从句）（省略状语从句）It is of use and value for you.(词性转换词性转换)If you want to come there.Please contact me.(条件状语从句条件状语从句)Only in these ways,can we make our writing more cohesive，attractive and full of varieties.Gifts in your future learning:1.Collect advanced words/sentences;2.Read more;3.Practice makes perfect;Homework书面表达：书面表达：为了帮助中学生健康成长，某中学英文报开辟了为了帮助中学生健康成长，某中学英文报开辟了“heart to heart”专栏。假设你是该栏目的编辑专栏。假设你是该栏目的编辑Jamie,收到一封署名为收到一封署名为Worried的求助信。信中该同学向你诉说了自己的困扰：今日容易的求助信。信中该同学向你诉说了自己的困扰：今日容易发脾气，使正常的学习和生活收到了影响。请你用英文给该同学写发脾气，使正常的学习和生活收到了影响。请你用英文给该同学写一封回信。一封回信。内容要点内容要点(key points)如下：如下：1、表示理解并给予安慰；、表示理解并给予安慰；2、提出建议并说明理由、提出建议并说明理由 注意：注意：1、词数、词数120左右；左右；2、信的、信的开头开头开头开头已写好，不计入总词数。已写好，不计入总词数。参考词汇：参考词汇：temper n.脾气，情绪脾气，情绪Hi Worried，Im sorry to know that youre having such a bad time at the moment.